Speech/Presentation

Nightmares Coming to Life

Meets Objective

Explanation:

I ranked myself as, “Meets Objective,” because I was able to present this speech in a fun way and I got a decent grade on it. I was able to bring facial expressions in at the right time and make body movements when they were necessary. I was also to get the audience involved and I made them want to hear more because I left some suspense at sometimes such as when I said in the middle of the fifth paragraph, “We got a steal. We were running back down the court. I was running at full speed. The ball was flying down the court. I was going to get it. I kept running and running.” People wanted to hear what happened because they could tell something would happen but they weren’t entirely sure. I can improve more to master it, but I feel like I got better and better with speaking in front of the class as the year progressed. I need to continue working on getting the audience involved and I need to use better word choice to keep them hooked and want to hear more.

Considering Author’s Craft and Style

Found Poem

Meets Objective

Explanation:

I ranked myself at, “Meets Objective,” because I was able to take the meaning of a speech and turn it into a poem. I enjoyed doing this even though it was a short side activity. I used a speech by Helen Keller called “Knights of the Blind.” Her speech was talking about how the actions of others matter to people like her even if it doesn’t look like it. I was able to take words from her speech and show this by saying, “Life would be different, a better world is important to have. It is more important to render life. Someday you will come together, stand with glad confidence. The best gift is not life, it’s blessing and comfort to others,” which is in the last stanza. I can improve, but I am proud of my arranging in this poem. It was fun being able to interpret the meaning of her speech into what it meant to me by using a poem to show that.

Holistic Reading and Application

Adversity Blog Reflection

Shows Improvement on Objective

Explanation:

I ranked this objective as, “Shows Improvement on Objective,” because I got better at being able to connect two things and show that they mean something together. I need to working on this still because I’m not the best at it but I can do it effectively. I compared adversity in the world today with the adversity going on in Eleanor’s life by saying, “I know that facing adversity can be challenging because it makes you face hard things that you don’t want to deal with. With what Eleanor had to go through, I feel like it was good for her to have someone like Park to help her through her difficult time. Even though Eleanor didn’t want anyone to know about what she was going through, I feel like she needed someone to help her get it off her chest.” I was able to show how the book could connect to someone facing adversity. I was showing that they could ask for help and it might help them. Also, I was able to show that sometimes someone just needs you to pry things out of the just like what Park did to Eleanor helped her come out with her problems that she was facing.

Close Reading and Analysis

Of Mice and Men Questions

Need to continue to work on objective

Explanation:

I ranked this with, “Needs to continue to work on objective,” because I didn’t do very well on this piece. The idea of the first part was to compare the character to a symbol, and though I might have done that, I feel like I could have done a lot better. Based on the comments I got back from Mr. Stoltenow, and based on what I think, I could have done a better job digging in to my character and I could have showed the similarities a little better. I need to work on this because it still isn’t a very strong piece for me and it would be best if I could make comparisons better. In the second paragraph, I wrote, “Lennie is an example of a character who is disposable. He is seen as someone who is less then anyone else because of the way he acts. However, there are a few other characters that are seen as disposable such as Crooks.” I could have done better with this because we were to choose one character to talk about and as you can tell in this, I talked about two and I didn’t ever show how they connected in the end of my answers to the questions.

Grammar and Punctuation

Memories that Last Forever

Shown Improvement on Objective

Explanation:

I ranked myself with “shown improvement on objective,” because I have gotten better with punctuation through out this year however, I still have some errors. I definitely have lots of room on improvement with this because I still have a hard time deciding if I’m putting punctuation in the right spot. In this paper in the third and fourth paragraphs, I had some comma errors such as, “The only things I still clearly remember were the screams of pain and agony coming from my mom and brothers. As well as, police sirens and lights showing up on a regular basis.” When it should be more like this, “The only things I still clearly remember were the screams of pain and agony coming from my mom and brothers, as well as police sirens and lights showing up on a regular basis.” These are small errors but could completely change the meaning of the paper if used completely wrong which is likely to happen. I am still working on this and have to improve before I can be moved to the completely meets objective ranking.

Big Picture Revisions and Small Revisions

Youths in the Foster Systems

Meets Objective

Explanation:

I ranked myself “meets objective,” because this piece took a lot of revisions and they made my piece sound more academic and more interesting. I am not a master because I definitely have room to improve. I got a decent grade on this paper but because of the many revisions I had to make. I was able to go from this to this. I also made small revisions such as changing my transitions from saying that “youths are also seen as disposable because they aren’t given money once they age out,” to, “Youths that are coming to the age of “aging out,” gain no money to help support their basic needs. These youths often struggle to find food, shelter, and other basic needs without financial support.” This wasn’t much growth but I did feel like I improved instead of staying the same by changing the topic suddenly with no reason. I have room for more improvement, but I changed a lot already this year and am willing to learn new ideas to make me improve even more as a writer.

Academic Writing

Youths in the Foster Systems

Meets Objective

Explanation:

I ranked myself as “meets objective,” because I was able to use research and apply it to something that meant a lot to me. I was able to put real facts down and show how this is a struggle in todays society. I used many different sources and I was able to get a decent grade on my paper, which shows that I was able to put meaning into the research. I would say I am a master at putting meaning to my research because at some places in this paper I don’t make a lot of sense with explaining what the quote has to do with anything. I could improve on that as well as some other places in order to reach the mastering of the objective. A place that I could do better with my quote integration is in the second to last paragraph, ““Educational achievement escapes many of these youth, with completion rates of high school as low as 34%.” (Reilly, Thorn 728). These youths don’t have anyone to encourage him or her to stick with it.” I could make the integration better by making the quote mean something significant instead of making it sound like I don’t care a lot about this topic when I really do.